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Soul Damage by ~Deblackraven:iconDeblackraven:

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Soul Damage

I smoke weed and drink
I don’t care what people think
it will kill my soul and rot my mind
but life rots you away by itself I find
everyone has a poison of choice
something to turn off the inner voice
that one that can echo through you
the one that is always so very true
to live in bliss is what I desire
so I live in sin down by hell’s fire
because you cannot love the light
unless that darkness inside you fight
that voice inside you do not heed
shedding fear one does not need
step forward and out of true fear
know that destiny is forever near
let not the weight of life be your death
struggle on with every single last breath
do what you want to remove the load
so in this place I will always abode
to drink and smoke the finest things
but they do not give me wings
they only help to drown the sorrow
so maybe I will be happy tomorrow
©2007-2009 ~Deblackraven
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Author's Comments

an in depth poem defining my recent decent into self medication. I think it is the first good poem I have written in a while.

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:iconthegreatninjarikku:
Mood: Speechless ~TheGreatNinjaRikku Aug 14, 2007, 7:43:14 AM
well, for deep thought, this is pretty good. though it's fixed i see there is a bit of a free style put into it ( because of lacking of punctuation) and i must really agree with your 4th line, life can be shit and by itself can cause people to give up, and destroy us. people try to grab onto material things to cope with the pain and can only hope to find happiness. i really enjoyed this

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At times I just want to hold you close, and other times I just want to wring your neck.
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~Deblackraven Aug 14, 2007, 6:44:22 PM
mhm, I may have been less then sober during the entire process of writing, editing and posting of this so punctuation may be a bit poor and grammar might suffer lol.

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hey, don't tease me about my hobbies, I don't tease you about being an asshole
there are three kinds of people in the universe, those who can count and those who cannot
The difference between you and me is that I know I'm childish
:iconeffamay:
~Effamay Aug 15, 2007, 11:34:42 AM
It's deep, so honest....
I really like this :+fav:

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Dum spiro spero.
:iconthegreatninjarikku:
~TheGreatNinjaRikku Aug 15, 2007, 3:10:02 PM
hell like i said it gives more of a freestyle, kinda gives the feeling the way people really talk and write when their speaking their mind

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At times I just want to hold you close, and other times I just want to wring your neck.
:icondeblackraven:
~Deblackraven Aug 15, 2007, 3:39:44 PM
:) thanks

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hey, don't tease me about my hobbies, I don't tease you about being an asshole
there are three kinds of people in the universe, those who can count and those who cannot
The difference between you and me is that I know I'm childish
:iconthegreatninjarikku:
~TheGreatNinjaRikku Aug 15, 2007, 5:28:35 PM
no problem :D

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At times I just want to hold you close, and other times I just want to wring your neck.
:icondeblackraven:
~Deblackraven Aug 20, 2007, 6:18:41 AM
:)

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hey, don't tease me about my hobbies, I don't tease you about being an asshole
there are three kinds of people in the universe, those who can count and those who cannot
The difference between you and me is that I know I'm childish
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