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                                               Final hour
My world is not
just what it seems
as these memories
haunt my dreams

those better times
and little crimes
gave me the drive
to stay alive

because what is wrong
lasted so very long
I feel so used
now that I’m refused

what’s stuck in my head
is her in my bed
and what I feel I lost
was something without cost

it’s my dignity
and I want it back
so don’t call me on
because I’ll attack

I know you’re weak
your secrets I will leak
till it gets back to you
then you are through

you can’t ever have my pride
because you’re not on my side
and I will not try
to win your eye

because it’s icy stare
show’s me what’s there
it tells me you don’t know
how to reap what you sow

So I walk away
and you will stay
now just let me fade
in this bed you laid

was it never enough
to give it a try
I could fade away
into your lie

but instead I might
just blow your shit away
I’ll win the fight
in the end I still wont stay

so watch my backside
as I walk no where
and with no one
without a care

because in this
your final hour
you have yourself
and I have the power
©2007-2009 ~Deblackraven
:icondeblackraven:

Author's Comments

this is something I wrote at about 5 AM this morning, kept working on all day and finally posted at 2 pm. I really hope you enjoy it, I really put effort into this one.

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:iconblue-strawberry:
I think this is good. You get the feelings across well, the anger and biterness especially. For me it brings back horrible memories but the fact you get the reader to feel strongly is a good thing. Well written, well done:)

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You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
:iconblue-strawberry:
I think this is good. You get the feelings across well, the anger and bitterness especially. For me it brings back horrible memories but the fact you get the reader to feel strongly is a good thing. Well written, well done:)

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You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
:icondeblackraven:
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. :)

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hey, don't tease me about my hobbies, I don't tease you about being an asshole
there are three kinds of people in the universe, those who can count and those who cannot
The difference between you and me is that I know I'm childish

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